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RE: A Poem I wrote
October 23, 2015 at 6:38 pm
It could be interpreted so many ways though.
Some may say that's a good thing but I say it's because the poem is vague and meaningless, it just has a contrast of 3 different themes in two groups of three words. Other than that there's no actual talent to it IMO, hence why I call my poem a B.S poem.
If you find it interesting and like it then fair enough... but I'm no poet.
My mother is a poet though.
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RE: A Poem I wrote
October 23, 2015 at 6:45 pm
(October 23, 2015 at 6:38 pm)Evie Wrote: It could be interpreted so many ways though.
Some may say that's a good thing but I say it's because the poem is vague and meaningless, it just has a contrast of 3 different themes in two groups of three words. Other than that there's no actual talent to it IMO, hence why I call my poem a B.S poem.
If you find it interesting and like it then fair enough... but I'm no poet.
My mother is a poet though. I'm not going to say it's bad or good(no offence)
If you have imagination though, you can make anything in to a "deeper meaning" as long as it's simple enough. I would say it's good, if it was the description I gave, but obviously i'm not going to interpret it in to something I don't like. It's an interesting thought though, that we often assume famous poets have a "deeper meaning" to their words, and prescribe our own meanings thinking the poet wrote it for a reason and/or was vague on purpose, when really the poet could have no idea what the f*ck they were talking about.
Anyways, I liked it, for what it's worth. 
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RE: A Poem I wrote
October 23, 2015 at 6:46 pm
(October 23, 2015 at 6:37 pm)Thena323 Wrote: That was very good, especially considering that you haven't really written any poetry before. My only suggestion is to be less concerned with rhyming. Sometimes it can be distracting and disrupt the flow...it's all about the flow. Thank you I really appreciate it!
Maybe i'll write some more sometime soon if i'm feeling inspired
Thanks for the suggestion as well.
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RE: A Poem I wrote
October 29, 2015 at 6:09 pm
Young man there is heaven or hell after you die
Keep it in mind!
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RE: A Poem I wrote
October 29, 2015 at 6:12 pm
(October 29, 2015 at 6:09 pm)TrueChristian Wrote: Young man there is heaven or hell after you die
Keep it in mind!
PROVE IT, asshole. Without quotes from your obnoxious offensive asinine idiotic wholly babble. Without "near-death" OMG I SAW GAWD" delusional stories. Scientific, measured, witnessed, and replicated proof.
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RE: A Poem I wrote
October 29, 2015 at 6:14 pm
(October 29, 2015 at 6:09 pm)TrueChristian Wrote: Young man there is heaven or hell after you die
Keep it in mind!
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RE: A Poem I wrote
October 29, 2015 at 6:22 pm
(This post was last modified: October 29, 2015 at 6:35 pm by Aoi Magi.)
(October 29, 2015 at 6:09 pm)TrueChristian Wrote: Young man there is heaven or hell after you die
Keep it in mind!
Oh no, they are right here. You don't need to die to go there.
Look, god imprisoned the devil in hell, right. And there's biblical proof, the devil walks amongst us. Now obviously you don't expect a prisoner walking around outside his prison, do you? Especially when that prison is made by a perfect, supreme, omnipotent being. So the only other explanation is, this is hell.
Oh, and people like you exist, there's that too!
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RE: A Poem I wrote
October 29, 2015 at 6:25 pm
(October 29, 2015 at 6:09 pm)TrueChristian Wrote: Young man there is heaven or hell after you die
Lol
No, there isn't. Grow up.
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RE: A Poem I wrote
October 30, 2015 at 7:38 pm
Ah the contradiction game... so very fun to play:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XNkjDuSVXiE
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RE: A Poem I wrote
November 11, 2015 at 6:34 pm
(This post was last modified: November 11, 2015 at 6:36 pm by lisah.)
(October 29, 2015 at 6:09 pm)TrueChristian Wrote: Young man there is heaven or hell after you die
Keep it in mind!
Then just keep that in mind
when you're being a jerk
or simply unkind.
(October 22, 2015 at 10:45 pm)heatiosrs Wrote: So this is a poem I wrote in bed at like 2 AM over the summer. I couldn't stop thinking so I decided to just put it in the words, got an idea to make a poem, and went with it. It took me a total of like 5 minutes. I'm posting this because I still really like it and have no other place to post it, and.. yeah.. maybe someone else will find that they share the same thoughts. I would normally feel embarrassed at this type of thing, but then I realized, the worst that can happen is someone doesn't like it. I can live with that. Oh i forgot to mention this was my fist poem I've ever wrote, I quite enjoyed reading it the day after, let me know if maybe I should start writing some more of these.
I look up and the starry night I can see
When I leave earth what will be left of me?
In all the books, we're told earth is our destiny,
Yet I can't help but wonder what lies in the galaxies.
How will I stand out as an individual human being?
Will I act on creativity and ideas exempt from fear of completing?
How shall I live unconcerned with others conceding?
What is life without ever taking a beating,
For fear of public recognition is only self-defeating
What is the purpose, if never looking for deeper meaning.
So alas, I look up at the night sky and must ponder the stars
For every hardship I face, I am reminded who we are
A product of evolution, and we've come so far
What only concerns myself will keep me barred
So when I die I know impact was made, if I could manage to change the stars.
I really like it!
I miss the days when I was inspired to write. Keep writing!
"My imagination makes me human and makes me a fool; it gives me all the world and exiles me from it."
Ursula K. Le Guin
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