I think it should be less revealing. I'm a rubbish writer and don't know your plot, but perhaps something along the lines of "The emotions as X held her newborn baby were as intense as the pain she had just endured. However these were not feelings of love nor joy, but of desperate hatred."
My favourite first line, from 1984: "It was a bright cold day in April and the clock was striking thirteen".
My favourite first line, from 1984: "It was a bright cold day in April and the clock was striking thirteen".
