(December 9, 2013 at 7:35 pm)StrongWaters Wrote:(December 9, 2013 at 7:31 pm)JesusHChrist Wrote: Awareness imparts reality to the expansion of abstract beauty. Therefore, our consciousness embraces the mechanics of mysteries. Which leads to greatness expressing your own acceptance.
You need a comma after mysteries.
Everybody's a critic.
How about:
Awareness imparts reality to the expansion of abstract beauty. Therefore, our consciousness embraces the mechanics of mysteries, leading to greatness expressing your own acceptance.