RE: Ontological Disproof of God
August 23, 2018 at 8:29 pm
(This post was last modified: August 23, 2018 at 8:48 pm by KevinM1.)
I would pay to see negatio attempt to order food at a drive-thru.
Also, for all of negatio's attempts to dazzle us with vocabulary, most of it is simply riddled with too many flourishes and odd turns of phrase ("while, all the while," using "ilk" without an established reference, etc.). Good writing is elegant. I mean, take the following:
A quick rewrite would be:
Small changes, but the removal of cruft makes it easier to read. Like I implied before, there's a difference between style and cramming in as many words as you know.
Assuming you're not a troll (of which I'm absolutely not convinced), learn to edit yourself and accept that in a attempt to transmit ideas, any language that distracts from that transmission should be omitted. More isn't always better, and requests for clarification aren't an indication of a simple mind. But, my degree is in communication, so what do I know?
Also, for all of negatio's attempts to dazzle us with vocabulary, most of it is simply riddled with too many flourishes and odd turns of phrase ("while, all the while," using "ilk" without an established reference, etc.). Good writing is elegant. I mean, take the following:
Quote:Since age thirteen I have spent sixty years reading philosophical writing that takes years and years to understand, and, I thought others relished the same process of encountering a written text which is seemingly unintelligible, and, after tremendous effort, coming to find that it is an absolutely beautiful ilk of thought poetry which transforms you being
A quick rewrite would be:
Quote:Since age thirteen I have spent sixty years reading philosophy that takes many years to understand, let alone master. I thought others relished the same process of encountering text which is seemingly unintelligible at first, but, after tremendous effort, finding that it is actually beautiful thought poetry which transforms your very being
Small changes, but the removal of cruft makes it easier to read. Like I implied before, there's a difference between style and cramming in as many words as you know.
Assuming you're not a troll (of which I'm absolutely not convinced), learn to edit yourself and accept that in a attempt to transmit ideas, any language that distracts from that transmission should be omitted. More isn't always better, and requests for clarification aren't an indication of a simple mind. But, my degree is in communication, so what do I know?
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