RE: Humbly Asking for Feedback
March 17, 2017 at 3:59 am
(This post was last modified: March 17, 2017 at 4:19 am by bennyboy.)
I only listened on my laptop, so ignore my comments if you already did the things I said.
Let me start first by saying I think the piece has a very nice atmospheric progression-- you add and subtract elements on a very nice curve over the whole piece, and the sounds work very nicely together.
As for critique: first of all, your most repeated theme (a bass note then the little piano riff) seems a little too soft on the timing of the first piano note-- maybe you humanized the pattern? It might be meant to feel chill or relaxed, but it feels slightly sloppy to me instead. I'd adjust volume levels of each not to get the mood, instead of having the timing like that. But hey, that's just how my particular ear hears it.
Also, with this kind of ambient music, you want to change the room size of the reverb to affect the "focal point" of the sound. Stereo separation can also help widen the field of vision, as can an exciter or a hint of overdrive. Strangely, the best example I've ever heard of this was the "I had you at hello" speech given by Tom Cruise in Jerry Maguire. I'd definitely have envelopes for those things rather than single settings. (I'll listen again with studio headphones, it's very possible that you did all these things and my audio at work just isn't good enough)
Let me start first by saying I think the piece has a very nice atmospheric progression-- you add and subtract elements on a very nice curve over the whole piece, and the sounds work very nicely together.
As for critique: first of all, your most repeated theme (a bass note then the little piano riff) seems a little too soft on the timing of the first piano note-- maybe you humanized the pattern? It might be meant to feel chill or relaxed, but it feels slightly sloppy to me instead. I'd adjust volume levels of each not to get the mood, instead of having the timing like that. But hey, that's just how my particular ear hears it.
Also, with this kind of ambient music, you want to change the room size of the reverb to affect the "focal point" of the sound. Stereo separation can also help widen the field of vision, as can an exciter or a hint of overdrive. Strangely, the best example I've ever heard of this was the "I had you at hello" speech given by Tom Cruise in Jerry Maguire. I'd definitely have envelopes for those things rather than single settings. (I'll listen again with studio headphones, it's very possible that you did all these things and my audio at work just isn't good enough)
