You can break structure for style or for emphasis. Identify the stanza scheme you'd like to try and then add an extra syllable to the lines where you want the stanza to end. If you think it's important, like your recurring line, take a syllable out or add an extra one. I find it helps me if I remove all punctuation and first structure, then add the most minimum punctuation just for additional emphasis.
Think of this internal sentence structure flow:
Oh say can you see -is actually only 5 syllables but it's 6 when you sing it so is it really
Oh, say can you see
Think of this internal sentence structure flow:
Oh say can you see -is actually only 5 syllables but it's 6 when you sing it so is it really
Oh, say can you see
"There ought to be a term that would designate those who actually follow the teachings of Jesus, since the word 'Christian' has been largely divorced from those teachings, and so polluted by fundamentalists that it has come to connote their polar opposite: intolerance, vindictive hatred, and bigotry." -- Philip Stater, Huffington Post
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