A heshe philosophy.

[WinterHold]

I think it's a poem.

Thank you, I was about to ask.  From the thread title, I thought it was going to be a rant against transgender people, but the post itself looks like an attempt at poetry.  Either way, it's dreadful.


Boru

Oh thank you too for the honest opinion; in terms of you judging a book by its cover, I advice you:

1-Read the contents of anything before judging (even with humans)
2-I don't tend to bash in poems, rather speak emotions, mostly love and suffering (Thought is would be nice for you to know that)

[BrianSoddingBoru4]

1-Read the contents of anything before judging (even with humans)

I did read it. That was how I came to the conclusion that it was dreadful.

2-I don't tend to bash in poems, rather speak emotions, mostly love and suffering (Thought is would be nice for you to know that)

Yes, your poem was all about emotive love and suffering. That doesn't mean it didn't suck (Thought it would be nice for you to know that).

Boru

[WinterHold]

1-Read the contents of anything before judging (even with humans)

I did read it.  That was how I came to the conclusion that it was dreadful.

But you said 

Thank you, I was about to ask. From the thread title, I thought it was going to be a rant against transgender people

So technically you're practicing "shoot first ask later"..
By your own words you judged from the cover, so...
Literally admitting here, that you judge my topics from their titles.


I think you're too caught up in anti-theism, that you got your reason shaken.

Yes, your poem was all about emotive love and suffering. That doesn't mean it didn't suck (Thought it would be nice for you to know that).

Exactly, that is healthy criticism that should help me in building my skills.
It's why I thanked you for citing.

[Foxaèr]

I did not think it was dreadful, at all.

I quite liked it.

It could perhaps use an improved form in the way it flows, but otherwise I found it better than most poetry.

[J a c k]

I liked it. Poetry is like food. There's stuff for all tastes.

[WinterHold]

Kitan

I'm not used to English poetry, if I wanted to be honest.
Arabic poetry dominated my life, for English though, my mind is hardwired to count the Arabic style, that has rules to preserve the rhyme and the musical tone in the poem. 

So I just pour my heart over the keyboard, just being myself ^_^
Thank you Kitan !

Mamacita

I hope mine tasted like strawberry or at least, cherries.
Thank you, Mamacita !

[BrianSoddingBoru4]

I did read it.  That was how I came to the conclusion that it was dreadful.

But you said 

Thank you, I was about to ask. From the thread title, I thought it was going to be a rant against transgender people

So technically you're practicing "shoot first ask later"..
By your own words you judged from the cover, so...
Literally admitting here, that you judge my topics from their titles.


I think you're too caught up in anti-theism, that you got your reason shaken.

Yes, your poem was all about emotive love and suffering. That doesn't mean it didn't suck (Thought it would be nice for you to know that).

Exactly, that is healthy criticism that should help me in building my skills.
It's why I thanked you for citing.

Exactly - I thought it was going to be a rant against transgender people. But this wasn't a judgment, it was an expectation (and one that I'm happy turned out to be wrong). If I'm in a bookshop and see the title, 'The History Of Wood Varnishes From 1820-1915', it's hardly a 'judging a book by its cover' to expect that I'm going to read about wood varnishes.

Quite frankly, I don't think you want criticism of your efforts at poetry so much as you want approval of them. That's not a shot, everyone wants approval. But you're in good company: it seems that nearly every feep with a keyboard and a modem fancies themselves a novelist or a poet or a scenarist and has no issue inflicting their drivel on the rest of us.

'We've all heard that a million monkeys banging on a million typewriters will eventually reproduce the entire works of Shakespeare. Now, thanks to the Internet, we know this is not true.' - Wilensky.

Boru

[FebruaryOfReason]

Um, guys.... I think Atlas is leading us up the garden path here. See the post-modernist essay generator: http://www.elsewhere.org/pomo/

For example:

The subconstructivist paradigm of discourse and social realism

Charles J. McElwaine

Department of Sociology, University of Illinois

Wilhelm Tilton

Department of English, Oxford University
1. Fellini and capitalist deconstruction

“Society is intrinsically unattainable,” says Lyotard; however, according to
Porter[1] , it is not so much society that is intrinsically
unattainable, but rather the economy of society. Thus, if the subconstructivist
paradigm of discourse holds, we have to choose between prematerialist
capitalism and dialectic subcultural theory. Social realism implies that
academe is capable of intent.

In a sense, Baudrillard promotes the use of prematerialist capitalism to
challenge hierarchy. In Gravity’s Rainbow, Pynchon denies social
realism; in V, although, he examines the subconstructivist paradigm of
discourse.

But Sontag uses the term ‘Lyotardist narrative’ to denote the common ground
between class and sexual identity. Buxton[2] holds that we
have to choose between prematerialist capitalism and capitalist narrative.

Therefore, the primary theme of Dietrich’s[3] analysis of
modernist theory is the rubicon, and eventually the paradigm, of predialectic
society. Debord suggests the use of prematerialist capitalism to modify
reality.

[Little lunch]

I think it was undoubtedly poetry and rather good at that.
Keep going Atlas, you have a real talent for this. :-)
I'm a bit surprised by the criticisms.

[WinterHold]

I think it was undoubtedly poetry and rather good at that.
Keep going Atlas, you have a real talent for this. :-)
I'm a bit surprised by the criticisms.

Pretty glad you liked it, giving it a read is also making me happy.
Thank you little lunch ^)^