For Fantasy/Sci-Fiction Lovers: What Makes You Reada Book?

[ApeNotKillApe]

Queen of the Quantum Realm in 82 words


Nobody knows where the deadly purple plague came from. Even the powerful Earth mage is scratching his head. But when his parents fall ill, Jawan looks for clues in places h e’s not supposed to go and finds himself trapped in a world of swirling mists and hostile subatomic particles. He thinks the queen is crazy to put him in a dungeon and then expect him to save her realm from their prophesied enemy. Until he realizes it’s his own world that’s in danger.

Does this blub fly or sink?

Honestly, I totally zoned out. I have no idea what most of those things mean by themselves or in relation to each other.

Give me a clear premise, set a tone, establish the protagonist and their goal - their conflict - in terms that I can understand.
There's a deadly plague. Fine, I understand what those are. The language leaves me confused on the tone. I don't really know where/when this is happening, or in what genre. But it does quickly establish what I assume is a major source of conflict, and that's a good thing.
Jawan's parents are sick and so our protagonist has clear motivation to do something about it. Great!
Other than that, to anyone who hasn't already read the thing and has context, it's nonsense, nonsense dealing with very abstract ideas. Fine when we have some proper context, not so much in a blurb.

I'm sure it's very interesting to you that the Earth mage is stumped but I don't know who that is or what that means. And the second half is a very brief and largely abstract summary of the plot. It's stuff I don't care about because I don't understand it yet.
Not to say I couldn't be persuaded to find it interesting, but you need to hook me on the emotional level before I can be expected to read far enough to find out. Communicate the theme. What is the story ABOUT and how does that concept relate to the development of the protagonist?

Intrigue, don't confuse.