Who's your audience?
If it's meant for science undergrads-- looks good. If it's meant for laypeople, I think you need to reduce the numbers down to more basic concepts. Once you pulled out the math, I had no way to know what ideas you were referring to.
If it's meant for science undergrads-- looks good. If it's meant for laypeople, I think you need to reduce the numbers down to more basic concepts. Once you pulled out the math, I had no way to know what ideas you were referring to.