Judge this harshly.

[Edwardo Piet]

Some parts are sort of incomprehensible because of the background noise(music) being too much. Other than that, this is really, really great. I wouldn't have blinked twice if I saw a slightly better version of this on youtube with tens of millions or views, you know?

This post is completely irrelevant. I am drunk. This is completely off-topic. I don't care if there's a chance that this is really bad idea. I know you love and respect honestly. I know what it's like to feel like you can't even be yourself and other people just want you to fucking lie to them if it's what they want to fucking hear. You feel like some kind of strange brother -- or younger twin -- to me. I feel like you think I'm disrespecting you or making fun of you when I just wish I could tell you what I want to tell you without disrespecting boundaries of other people I care about.

Again, this is probably a bad idea. I'm drunk as fuck. You're a real awesome person. I hate how people dehumanize you. I hate how people devalue you because you're different (which all things being equal is a good thing IMO).

I don't even care if this is probably a bad idea. I'm drunk and i have the confidence to go for the longshot. High chance of failure but high success if and only if it works.

I'm drunk, I'm fearless in terms of my honesty and opening-upness. I love you as a person with real feelings who I care about and people who dehumanize you are treat you as subhuman merely because they don't like the way you are and don't understand your unique -- and rather beautiful, in a completely platonic way -- personality can go and fucking fuck themselves.

If and only if you do not want to PM me more ever again outside a staff context that is absolutely fine.

MOST IMPORTANTLY THIS IS COMPLETELY IRRELEVANT TO THE TOPIC

One off topic post is not against the rules. I want to tell you something in private but I cannot even if it is to say that I want to tell you something in private but I cannot. I do not care if I receive any reprecussions and I want to be extremely (completely basically) fair and objective to you. I am human. I am subjective in my thinking. i am biased. But despite other focuses and priotirites in my life I want to try extra hard to be extra hard and unbiased to you.

This is NOT an act. This IS complete and utter honesty. Even if it not for my own good. Beer does this to me. You may just dismiss me. Again this is probably a terrible idea and this may just be a "Okayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy that was weird" reaction..... but I don't give a fuck so fucking what I'm drinking beer and all my honesty is coming out so fucking what. I don't give two fucks. I just care about being me. The real me. And you want to be the real you too, EP. I know you do. You want to be the real you without other people devaluing and dehumanizing you.

WHAT is fucking worse than someone saying "I want the truth. Just be honest with me." and then when you are exactly like they wanted you to they get offended and make you feel like you CANNOT be honest with them and give you the truth.

Well, obviously, techically many things are worse than that. But... in the narriative of my life that is one of the most confusing things to me. And I feel that you feel the same way. We're not so different you and I.

This may seem poetic. This may seem insane. This may seem a bit of both...

Most of all... this is just me drunk + truly fully honest honesty I mean it I don't lie on open forum like this -- guess what I DON'T LIE AT ALL I HAVE A PHOBIA OF LYING.

I love you guys, the people of AF.

I am FINE. Beer does weird things to me but only in terms of my behavior. My health is fine. Watch me be back to normal as soon as my drunkenness disappears. I just fucking LOVE how this lets me open up.

EP, I wish you could just open up and be the real you and most of all I wish I could trust you, whoever you are, and I want to.

Haha, anyways -- so easy for people to overact to bunch of text. Hard to sense reflection, intention, depth and subtext within text alone. I'm fine guys. I love this place.

I'm someone who almost never drinks. I love how expansive alchol makes me open up.

Look at ME opening up -- the guy who ALREADY opens up: opening up even more.

"Well, that was weird... this is not within the normal limits and confines of normal social behavior... this is so very unhibited" you may or may not think

Well, what do you expect? I am drunk as fuck AND a turtle (lol!): Most importantly the weird quirky turtle is bound to get weirder when under the influence of alcohol.

Really, I'm fine you guys, I'm safe, I'm happy, I'm honest, I have no regrets: This may not even seem worrying to you guys just strange... you may even appreciate this post very much. You may (or may not) worry (or be concerned) that I am worrying (or concerned) that this post seems weird or bothersome to you guys (the people of AF (that= "you guys)) when it does not.... but THAT is nothing to worry about EITHER. My intelligence, my high levels (not bragging, high in the sense of above average, you draw any conclusions you wish) is in overdrive in terms of expression................... AND this means and implies -- that I am self-referentially monitoring myself in order to make this message very very clear but that is not the same of 'something to worry about' it is instead merely the same as (the concept of) 'a turtle under the influence of beer with virtually no inhibitions -- and those absence of inhibitions are also expressed harmlessly (although they may be incorrectly judged as harmful and that may then cause harm in the sense of emotional worry or concern which complicates issues (hence why I am insisting that no one need be worried or concerned... REALLY trust me. I'm drunk but still intelligent (if you even know or have any sense of what I am talking about LOL) SOMEONE on AF, if not the person I am closest to then at least someone with a similar personality or similar learning-style or way of seeing the word (type of thinking, I'm not a visual thinker, maybe verbal thinkers will quote-unquote 'get me' or whatever)))).

Anywaysssssssssssssssssssssss:

This post is completely irrelevant but if I receive just only ONE kudos from it that will be enough to make me feel a little sexily awesome (good basically, hyperbolbic entertainment is the name of my turtley game)-- go figure, go figure, go figure, go figure. But I am open to input talk to ME about it (whoever you are) if you are concerned (or something similar regardless of if you rationalzie otherwise).

Hahahah. Strange and interesting individual? Me? Nah. Something to worry about anyway? "I don't know what to think?" Or simply "WTF?!??!?!" May be your (the hypotehtical you, the reader) reaction.

If you don't know what to think just think of this as prosaic (non-rhyming, written like normal writing) turtley drunken poetry

ETA: HUGEEEEEEE amounts of digression. Whatever, I'm druink. (harmless yeah?) I sober up soon.

If anyone is hurt or concerned please PM me, really. But AGAIN they shouldn't be I'm fine. Just drunk. This is normal for me when drunk. (I enjoy it, do you enjoy it? Interesting at all?) -- let's play a GAME: find as many positives as you can from this post and tell me about those positives ^___________^ : let's play LOOK ON THE 'BRIGHT' (really really bright (scare quotes just for effect)) side and TELL the turtle. That should be a fun game.

[Edwardo Piet]

FUCK I am happy as fuck.

Anywayssssssssss.

(beer)

[rado84]

I couldn't hear all of it because the network changed from H+ to Edge almost immediately after it started playing but if the whole thing is the same as the first 20 seconds, I'm glad I couldn't hear the whole thing. I hate slow and slushy songs. If it were of these genres, I would be far more objective: Death/folk/Viking metal, AC/DC kind of rock, American country music like Alan Jackson or even hip-hop.

[The Valkyrie]

Click on thr SS?

Is this a link to nazi propaganda?

[Gemini]

FUCK I am happy as fuck.

Anywayssssssssss.

(beer)

[Thumpalumpacus]

[...] but if the whole thing is the same as the first 20 seconds [...]

It's not.

And Alan Jackson? Pardon me while I puke my fucking guts out.

[Homeless Nutter]

All in all - not a bad effort, if not necessarily my kind of music.

I liked the quiet parts, although the vocalist mumbles a bit and falls out of sync with the guitar in the last few bars before the punk-rock explosion. The middle of the song has a huge bass-guitar-shaped hole in it. If you don't have a bass available - you can just record a simple bass-line using a guitar with an octaver, or pitch-shifter, plus some appropriate equalization and compression. A strong, tight bass-line could really bring the track together.

The sound during the loud part is a bit messy, as some people already pointed out, mainly due to guitars and vocals occupying similar frequencies, too much reverb and not enough high frequencies, compression and generally volume on vocals.

Drums - particularly the kick - are a bit too loud at times. Don't go crazy on programmed drum-fills, they always sound kinda fake, especially in contrast with actual live guitars, so try not to bring too much attention to them. You have some guitar skills - emphasize those, to create rhythmical variation instead.

Rhythm guitar is a little claustrophobic in tone, lacks low-mid frequencies and dynamic variety - which is particularly noticeable, due to the lack of bass. You could play around with your main riff, play it with different articulations and effects, as the song progresses, to stop the ear from losing interest and to make room for vocals, when needed.

Solo guitar sounds impressive, especially the shredding and the bending, although could use some more melody here and there, for my taste.

Here's a tip, for making your guitars sit better in a mix with vocals - record your rhythm/lead guitar part twice, then pan the tracks hard left and right. That way guitar will sound more "spacey" - like an organic chorus effect - and leave more headroom in the center of the stereo spectrum for other parts, especially the vocals. You can experiment with different EQ and effect settings on each side to make the sound more or less full, just be careful not to mix them too loud, because doubled part means twice the volume of the original. If you're finding the sound too ethereal and lacking in punch - you can pan the tracks closer together, or have one more, louder version in the center - but again be careful with the levels.

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Example (WARNING - may be loud):

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I know this is against the instinct of every guitarist EVER, but always make sure to prioritize the vocals. Which is all the more difficult, when your singer mumbles, so tell him to open his mouth more next time...

Anyway - hope that's "harsh" enough...

[Little lunch]

That's a fucking great song. I'm really impressed Paul.
I have no criticisms. It's like the opening sound track to a really good movie.
Really, I'm blown away.
When you bring out the album I want a signed copy from you please.
I'll pay the postage and all that. :-)

[rado84]

[...] but if the whole thing is the same as the first 20 seconds [...]

It's not.

And Alan Jackson? Pardon me while I puke my fucking guts out.

Phahaha, have a nice puking.

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=JW5UEW2kYvc

[paulpablo]

Some people have rightly noticed there's no bass.

The story behind that is basically I have a bass guitar but in recording I noticed a background hiss that was kind of constant, my bass guitar is old and fairly cheap so I put it down to that.

I might attempt to program a bass line on there, even if it's just simple.

It's weird, I can hear the lyrics to the song ok myself, I'll have another listen and see if they need turning up. Same with the reverb, it's kind of the sound i was going for, I've listened to it fairly loud in my car and the clarity sounds ok to me.
The only thing I can think is that I either have a different taste in what I like to hear, a lot of songs I like are roughly recorded punk songs.
Or I can tell what he's saying because he's from Manchester England where I'm from.

I'm glad people like the singing, the singer used to be pretty rough.

The thing about creating this song is that I'm a guitarist, I have no interest in buying an expensive bass, or learning the drums, hence why I've had to use the ez drummer drum program and left the bass out of this one, I'm going to try and program the bass now also using fruity loops if I can find a synth that sounds remotely bass guitar like.