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So I wrote a poem..
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RE: So I wrote a poem..
February 15, 2016 at 7:37 am (This post was last modified: February 15, 2016 at 7:38 am by Homeless Nutter.)
(February 15, 2016 at 5:09 am)pool the great Wrote: [...]
Do you have any suggestions?
[...]

Hmmm... Try using the word "heart" more... Tongue


(February 15, 2016 at 1:58 am)pool the great Wrote: You were an enigma to me once.

But now you have carved your face in my heart

Your face eternal you evoke my long hidden emotions.

Without you I experience a drought in my heart.

Without you a meaninglessness to my heart,to my life,to my
long hidden emotions.

You are the heroin of my life.

You are the one who I've been waiting for.

For your presence makes my heart skips a beat.

Your heart illegible to my mind.

Your smile as though the moon.

Your gaze confuse my rhythmic heart beat for your love

Your eyes reincarnate my heart in your engaging soul

You are my only and true love.

For we are the only and truly soul mates.


Also - try rhyming. Bad poetry, that rhymes is often amusing. As in:

Roses are red
Violets are blue
I'd like to stick
My penis in you.
"The fact that a believer is happier than a skeptic is no more to the point than the fact that a drunken man is happier than a sober one." - George Bernard Shaw
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So I wrote a poem.. - by ErGingerbreadMandude - February 15, 2016 at 1:58 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Exian - February 15, 2016 at 4:40 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Alex K - February 15, 2016 at 4:48 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Excited Penguin - February 15, 2016 at 4:42 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by ErGingerbreadMandude - February 15, 2016 at 5:09 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Homeless Nutter - February 15, 2016 at 7:37 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Brian37 - February 15, 2016 at 8:07 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Brian37 - February 15, 2016 at 8:02 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Thumpalumpacus - February 15, 2016 at 12:24 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Brian37 - February 15, 2016 at 12:34 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Excited Penguin - February 15, 2016 at 4:33 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Thumpalumpacus - February 15, 2016 at 6:45 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Exian - February 15, 2016 at 4:53 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by ErGingerbreadMandude - February 15, 2016 at 5:07 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Exian - February 16, 2016 at 7:45 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by ignoramus - February 15, 2016 at 6:59 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by ErGingerbreadMandude - February 15, 2016 at 8:03 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by ErGingerbreadMandude - February 15, 2016 at 8:09 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Brian37 - February 15, 2016 at 8:27 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Thumpalumpacus - February 15, 2016 at 3:32 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Brian37 - February 15, 2016 at 3:55 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by vorlon13 - February 15, 2016 at 3:37 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Homeless Nutter - February 15, 2016 at 4:11 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by ignoramus - February 15, 2016 at 3:46 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by John V - February 15, 2016 at 4:21 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Brian37 - February 15, 2016 at 4:30 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Athene - February 15, 2016 at 6:14 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Ravenshire - February 15, 2016 at 6:40 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Thumpalumpacus - February 15, 2016 at 6:46 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Brian37 - February 15, 2016 at 6:57 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by ignoramus - February 15, 2016 at 7:43 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by John V - February 15, 2016 at 9:40 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Athene - February 15, 2016 at 10:40 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by ErGingerbreadMandude - February 15, 2016 at 10:46 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Excited Penguin - February 15, 2016 at 6:56 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Brian37 - February 15, 2016 at 6:59 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by BrianSoddingBoru4 - February 15, 2016 at 7:04 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Athene - February 15, 2016 at 7:13 pm
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Brian37 - February 16, 2016 at 7:07 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Brian37 - February 16, 2016 at 7:29 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Brian37 - February 16, 2016 at 8:08 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by John V - February 16, 2016 at 9:02 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Brian37 - February 16, 2016 at 9:08 am
RE: So I wrote a poem.. - by Exian - February 16, 2016 at 10:00 am

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