Debunking of Modern Evolutionary and Cosmological Theories

[Angrboda]

On the whole, I'd say it's a well written essay, with the exception of the above paragraph, which is atrocious and seems more like cheerleading for your own view than anything substantive.

Are you high? In what universe is the second paragraph acceptable? 

First of all, it must be made clear that the modern scientific community is corrupt.  Donald Scott, who is the author of the Electric Sky: A Challenge to the Myths of Modern Astronomy, explains yet another possibility to the origin of matter.

That's atrocious. I'm willing to ignore that the scientific claims are bonkers, but that is not good writing, the first and second sentence don't follow from each other. How about ""

That's not the complete second paragraph. I'll admit that the paragraph is not the high point of English writing, but I would argue its primary fault lies in that it is badly argued, not so much that it is bad writing. The second sentence makes sense in context.

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Ok, looking at this purely form an English paper perspective, you need to work more on your grammar.  In the very first sentence you have singular and plural words mixed together.  What grade is this for, somewhere in High School I'm guessing?

It isn't poorly written.  If I was an English Teacher (and I almost was), I'd give it a C+.  That has nothing to do with the content, mind you, just based on your numerous basic English errors.

My English must really suck.  I didn't notice that many errors in it.  Probably why I'm not an English teacher.

It's a shame we don't have a whiteboard that we can throw this on and mark it up.