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Some poetry
#11
RE: Some poetry
@Losty
-I really like this one. I amazed that you wrote it at nine years old. I wrote poetry when I was really young too, but nothing quite so eloquent.
Thanks. Care to share some of your written work? You can post it in this thread if you want to, I won't mind.

@Pickup_shonuff
-Keep it up. By the way, have you read any Charles Bukowski?
I haven't read much of him. The only poem I can remember from him is "Gold in your eye".

@Little lunch
-Here's a couple more from Adam Ford.
I have to admit, the second one was somehow hilarious.
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#12
RE: Some poetry
My favourite limerick.

There once was a lady from Spain,
Who was awfully sick on a train.
Not once but again and again and again,
and again and again and again.

Spike Milligan.


My favourite Haiku.

I put five here.
Another seven here.
What more do you want?
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#13
RE: Some poetry
Hmm...sure I guess.


(August 21, 2017 at 11:31 pm)KevinM1 Wrote: "I'm not a troll"
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Hammy Wrote:and we also have a sheep on our bed underneath as well
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#14
RE: Some poetry
@Losty
-Hmm...sure I guess.


Nice! I like it, even though I'm not into love and "I can't live without you" stuff. Good job nevertheless.
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#15
RE: Some poetry
Yea people tend to assume it's a romance thing. It's actually about child abuse. But I haven't figured out how to convey that message without just coming out and saying it.

And thank you
(August 21, 2017 at 11:31 pm)KevinM1 Wrote: "I'm not a troll"
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Hammy Wrote:and we also have a sheep on our bed underneath as well
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#16
RE: Some poetry
I do not like criticizing other's poetry. I only say if I like it or not. I have always found that others may like something I don't. I have written 400 plus. I am always amazed at what people like. Just keep writing, that is what matters.

(July 12, 2014 at 6:00 am)Losty Wrote: Yea people tend to assume it's a romance thing. It's actually about child abuse. But I haven't figured out how to convey that message without just coming out and saying it.

And thank you

While poetry shouldn't be "see spot run", it also does not have to be so coded the message gets missed.

I love Hitchens, but outside "GodIs Not Great", most of his books are high pitched as far as oxford words. There is something to be said for simplicity.
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#17
RE: Some poetry
Nice one, Losty.
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#18
RE: Some poetry
In my mid twenties I had a go at writing some poetry. Here is one rhymer and one not.

Something about autonomy and relationship.

Wholest each together be.
Between the two a rainbow see.
All is seen through either eye
but depth requires two should try.


Sorry. I would tell you what this one was about but I'm no longer high.

Not doing.
Not withholding doing.
Nothing above.
No thing below.
See.
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#19
RE: Some poetry
(July 12, 2014 at 6:33 am)Brian37 Wrote: While poetry shouldn't be "see spot run", it also does not have to be so coded the message gets missed.

It's not really meant to be coded. It was originally meant to be an intro for a book I was thinking of writing. You have a book about child abuse with that intro and the point is obvious. I've changed it a lot since I first wrote it, but it's meaning is still hard to decipher. I'm okay with that for now. It's mine and I like it, but if I decide to make it more public I will have to change it or accept that it will always be assumed to be about romantic love.
(August 21, 2017 at 11:31 pm)KevinM1 Wrote: "I'm not a troll"
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Hammy Wrote:and we also have a sheep on our bed underneath as well
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#20
RE: Some poetry
These are a some poems I wrote, untitled:












He who loves God cannot endeavour that God should love him in return - Baruch Spinoza
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