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RE: Humbly Asking for Feedback
February 18, 2017 at 9:26 pm
It needs some aggressive dubstep wobbles and some grime lyrics.
Just kidding it sounded alright to me, pretty mellow. Like a flaming lips type of feel.
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RE: Humbly Asking for Feedback
February 18, 2017 at 9:37 pm
A bit repetitive but pleasant.
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RE: Humbly Asking for Feedback
February 18, 2017 at 10:16 pm
Dude I fucking dig it. I like how the main melody feels like it sort of falling behind a bit. Makes the notes seem deliberate. But yeah its cool and moody. I see some people saying it's repetitive and I can understand that, but I don't think it's lacking anything sonically, but instead visually. This would go great under a movie.
I can't remember where this verse is from, I think it got removed from canon:
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For context, this is the previous verse:
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RE: Humbly Asking for Feedback
February 19, 2017 at 3:13 am
Yeah, I like that it's in six, and that the melody's notes fall on off-beats -- it gives it a lurching feel that works against the electro-ambience, which is usually a genre filled with tight pockets. The contrast between the two elements, sonus and groove, gives it an unsettling tension that's almost troubling, and then accentuated with the Wilder sample.
It evokes darker feelings and a smoldering intensity.
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RE: Humbly Asking for Feedback
February 19, 2017 at 3:29 am
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I really like it.
I am a bit unsettled by the E coming in on the offbeat, but I think that's intentional.
This is the kind of stuff I listen to when I study or read. I've put Hammy's soundcloud channel on when I tire of my Spotify study list, too.
ETA: I like "Existential Hoops" even more!
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RE: Humbly Asking for Feedback
February 19, 2017 at 10:15 am
I don't hate it.
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RE: Humbly Asking for Feedback
February 19, 2017 at 10:33 am
That's dope, dude.
This is a pretty good beat to spit some rhymes to.
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RE: Humbly Asking for Feedback
February 19, 2017 at 10:53 am
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RE: Humbly Asking for Feedback
February 19, 2017 at 11:49 am
I didn't know you did music, FNM. I enjoyed listening to this. Great job!
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