That's an interesting short story, and an excellent reading as well. I love the descriptive language and the way you put yourself right in the position of the character.

(February 1, 2018 at 1:30 pm)Rhondazvous Wrote:

(February 1, 2018 at 10:33 am)Brian37 Wrote: If it were just in print, I think the imagery alone sparks the interest. I could picture myself running into a deaf person myself, and doing the same as she described. I can also see in her word choice, that the spark is there, the wanting to live is there, and it shows, in her words too, not just her voice. 

Art is in print too. She sounds great in voice too. There is something to be said for print too. I know there are books I have read, that painted pictures in my brain. I think Rhonda is great at both voice and print. 

I will say this myself. Many people like some of my poems, some of them are junk. But Rhonda can do both. I'm more of the type that if to be read, I'd rather hear someone else read my stuff aloud. Rhonda is a double threat because she is a far better reader than I am. AND she also writes stories and poetry, whereas I only write poetry.

I loved it, and I do envy her talent.

Oh, that's not me reading. That's my mother. Let me see some of your stuff. We're accepting submissions for the spring issue of our Spoken Word poetry journal. Your poems will be read by a Chicago television and radio personality on my staff. It doesn't have to rhyme.
http://visionswithvoices.com

I have 900 plus written over 30 years. In the thread link below. The website isn't 30 years old, just my history of writing poems. It is the website in my sig.

CRAP, put me on the spot why don't you?

"The Illusion" here is the link. 

http://www.rationalresponders.com/forum/20870

"Ego Divinely Inspired" post #87  here at this link

http://www.rationalresponders.com/forum/31771?page=1

"Don't Say Goodbye" link here. ALSO hosted at Rational Responders. But posted here on this website  as well at this link. Post #83

https://atheistforums.org/thread-47858-page-9.html

I would be honored for your staff to read any of those. Just credit them to to Brian James Rational Poet (AKA, Brian37 of Rational Responders).

I am flattered. I read your work, like today and I think you are just WOW, so to be read on the same website would be an honor.

(February 1, 2018 at 7:22 pm)Brian37 Wrote:

(February 1, 2018 at 1:30 pm)Rhondazvous Wrote: Oh, that's not me reading. That's my mother. Let me see some of your stuff. We're accepting submissions for the spring issue of our Spoken Word poetry journal. Your poems will be read by a Chicago television and radio personality on my staff. It doesn't have to rhyme.
http://visionswithvoices.com

I have 900 plus written over 30 years. In the thread link below. The website isn't 30 years old, just my history of writing poems. It is the website in my sig.

CRAP, put me on the spot why don't you?

"The Illusion" here is the link. 

http://www.rationalresponders.com/forum/20870

"Ego Divinely Inspired" post #87  here at this link

http://www.rationalresponders.com/forum/31771?page=1

"Don't Say Goodbye" link here. ALSO hosted at Rational Responders. But posted here on this website  as well at this link. Post #83

https://atheistforums.org/thread-47858-page-9.html

I would be honored for your staff to read any of those. Just credit them to to Brian James Rational Poet (AKA, Brian37 of Rational Responders).

I am flattered. I read your work, like today and I think you are just WOW, so to be read on the same website would be an honor.

Hey I just realized something. When you post here at AF, it's actually poetry. This is your style. Kewl!

Okay, I sent the 3 to the reader. I'm sure he will like them and we will have the Brian James Rational Poet Spring Collection on March 31. Invite all your friends to Like and Tweet your page.

(February 2, 2018 at 11:24 am)Rhondazvous Wrote:

(February 1, 2018 at 7:22 pm)Brian37 Wrote: I have 900 plus written over 30 years. In the thread link below. The website isn't 30 years old, just my history of writing poems. It is the website in my sig.

CRAP, put me on the spot why don't you?

"The Illusion" here is the link. 

http://www.rationalresponders.com/forum/20870

"Ego Divinely Inspired" post #87  here at this link

http://www.rationalresponders.com/forum/31771?page=1

"Don't Say Goodbye" link here. ALSO hosted at Rational Responders. But posted here on this website  as well at this link. Post #83

https://atheistforums.org/thread-47858-page-9.html

I would be honored for your staff to read any of those. Just credit them to to Brian James Rational Poet (AKA, Brian37 of Rational Responders).

I am flattered. I read your work, like today and I think you are just WOW, so to be read on the same website would be an honor.

Hey I just realized something. When you post here at AF, it's actually poetry. This is your style. Kewl!

Okay, I sent the 3 to the reader. I'm sure he will like them and we will have the Brian James Rational Poet Spring Collection on March 31. Invite all your friends to Like and Tweet your page.

To quote Axle Foley from Beverly Hills Cop, "I just fell in love with you." *Blushing*

(February 1, 2018 at 10:33 am)Brian37 Wrote: If it were just in print, I think the imagery alone sparks the interest. I could picture myself running into a deaf person myself, and doing the same as she described. I can also see in her word choice, that the spark is there, the wanting to live is there, and it shows, in her words too, not just her voice. 

Here it is in print and voice.
http://visionswithvoices.com/listheart

(February 1, 2018 at 7:40 am)Rhondazvous Wrote: I want to put this short story on iTunes as a podcast. Does it sound high quality enough or does it sound homemade?

http://rhondadenisejohnson.com/10ListHeart.mp3

I'm no expert but that sounds pretty damned expert.

(February 2, 2018 at 11:24 am)Rhondazvous Wrote:

(February 1, 2018 at 7:22 pm)Brian37 Wrote: I have 900 plus written over 30 years. In the thread link below. The website isn't 30 years old, just my history of writing poems. It is the website in my sig.

CRAP, put me on the spot why don't you?

"The Illusion" here is the link. 

http://www.rationalresponders.com/forum/20870

"Ego Divinely Inspired" post #87  here at this link

http://www.rationalresponders.com/forum/31771?page=1

"Don't Say Goodbye" link here. ALSO hosted at Rational Responders. But posted here on this website  as well at this link. Post #83

https://atheistforums.org/thread-47858-page-9.html

I would be honored for your staff to read any of those. Just credit them to to Brian James Rational Poet (AKA, Brian37 of Rational Responders).

I am flattered. I read your work, like today and I think you are just WOW, so to be read on the same website would be an honor.

Hey I just realized something. When you post here at AF, it's actually poetry. This is your style. Kewl!

Okay, I sent the 3 to the reader. I'm sure he will like them and we will have the Brian James Rational Poet Spring Collection on March 31. Invite all your friends to Like and Tweet your page.

You don't need to pay me, as long as you attribute it to "Brian James Rational Poet, AKA Brian37 of Rational Responders". And while I am giving you permission to publish these three, I retain all rights to my work. Donate the money to your favorite charity.

I would like to remain anonymous so no bio or photo. 

I will say that I got my start at a local Poetry group in Northern Va, have been writing since the late 80s. 

"The Illusion" is pretty easy I think to understand. I am basically saying that everyone dies, and there is no afterlife, but you can still value the here and now and find love and joy while you are alive.

"Ego Divinely Inspired", I wrote after 9/11. It is about how religion can lead to violence. My views have changed since writing that. I STILL believe in the good in my fellow humans. I wrote it while attending a Unitarian Church, full of not only Christians but a couple of Muslims, a Buddhist, Pagan, and 3 atheists, two of them, not me, former military.
I have grown since to be more skeptical of all religions. I still however value the message of non violence in that poem.

"Don't Say Goodbye", is a poem about my mothers health decline and eventual death. The game depicted in the poem started after she had an operation, when at first we thought she would just have therapy  and we thought she would recover, but ended up being told by therapy she would not be able to live on her own again, so she ended up staying long term care. We still thought at that point she was ok, but her operation ended up getting re infected, and at that point she decided not to go any further with treatment. The game started at her nursing home as my silly way of saying goodbye and that I would see her tomorrow.

(February 6, 2018 at 7:51 am)Brian37 Wrote: You don't need to pay me, as long as you attribute it to "Brian James Rational Poet, AKA Brian37 of Rational Responders". And while I am giving you permission to publish these three, I retain all rights to my work. Donate the money to your favorite charity.

I would like to remain anonymous so no bio or photo. 

I will say that I got my start at a local Poetry group in Northern Va, have been writing since the late 80s. 

"The Illusion" is pretty easy I think to understand. I am basically saying that everyone dies, and there is no afterlife, but you can still value the here and now and find love and joy while you are alive.

"Ego Divinely Inspired", I wrote after 9/11. It is about how religion can lead to violence. My views have changed since writing that. I STILL believe in the good in my fellow humans. I wrote it while attending a Unitarian Church, full of not only Christians but a couple of Muslims, a Buddhist, Pagan, and 3 atheists, two of them, not me, former military.
I have grown since to be more skeptical of all religions. I still however value the message of non violence in that poem.

"Don't Say Goodbye", is a poem about my mothers health decline and eventual death. The game depicted in the poem started after she had an operation, when at first we thought she would just have therapy  and we thought she would recover, but ended up being told by therapy she would not be able to live on her own again, so she ended up staying long term care. We still thought at that point she was ok, but her operation ended up getting re infected, and at that point she decided not to go any further with treatment. The game started at her nursing home as my silly way of saying goodbye and that I would see her tomorrow.

So let it be written. So let it be done.