For the sake of giving constructive criticism, I'm going to assume that this is the story in its entirety, rather than just an introduction to the plot that continues beyond what you've written.
I liked the setting and the subject, but I thought the overall background plot could have been developed more. I would have the conversation between Lucifer and the cherub much longer and go deeper into the conflict that arose. It would allow you to give more details and develop the hostility and tension between the two sides better.
I would also work on the continuity and description of the action. I didn't feel like the true picture was being painted, and it was more of just a sterile description of some things happening. It also felt fragmented and needed more of a flow.
Overall, I thought it was good but you just need to develop the points you are trying to make with the story to a fuller extent.
I liked the setting and the subject, but I thought the overall background plot could have been developed more. I would have the conversation between Lucifer and the cherub much longer and go deeper into the conflict that arose. It would allow you to give more details and develop the hostility and tension between the two sides better.
I would also work on the continuity and description of the action. I didn't feel like the true picture was being painted, and it was more of just a sterile description of some things happening. It also felt fragmented and needed more of a flow.
Overall, I thought it was good but you just need to develop the points you are trying to make with the story to a fuller extent.
Even if the open windows of science at first make us shiver after the cozy indoor warmth of traditional humanizing myths, in the end the fresh air brings vigor, and the great spaces have a splendor of their own - Bertrand Russell
