I liked it but it needs a lot of work. Several sentences are fragments aside from the one already pointed out.
Some of the action is a bit confusing - I didn't get how everything was suddenly plunged into darkness as it was apparently already night.
You've made the whole ensemble much more human that I think I would have done - jugular vein? On an angel? Stabbed through the heart?
There is definitely something there. I have seen other stories with role reversals for God and the devil. You might want to get hold of a copy of the Deathbird Stories (Harlan Ellison). That is a collection of short stories but the last one is the Deathbird story and that is the one that would be of interest.
Making the devil blond is a nice touch - I'm assuming you have done away with the horns, tail and red complexion. The fedora is hilarious. Definitely keep that.
Some of the action is a bit confusing - I didn't get how everything was suddenly plunged into darkness as it was apparently already night.
You've made the whole ensemble much more human that I think I would have done - jugular vein? On an angel? Stabbed through the heart?
There is definitely something there. I have seen other stories with role reversals for God and the devil. You might want to get hold of a copy of the Deathbird Stories (Harlan Ellison). That is a collection of short stories but the last one is the Deathbird story and that is the one that would be of interest.
Making the devil blond is a nice touch - I'm assuming you have done away with the horns, tail and red complexion. The fedora is hilarious. Definitely keep that.
Kuusi palaa, ja on viimeinen kerta kun annan vaimoni laittaa jouluvalot!