Darkness at the arch (A story I wrote)

[Cinjin]

Didn't care for it.

Boru

Your opinion is valid, but as a matter of politeness, etiquette, and common decency, why don't you offer the man some explanation. Maybe some constructive criticism instead of a cold remark that offers nothing. You just came off as purposefully rude.

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IMO:
It's an interesting take on Lucifer, but I feel like you're trying to put way too much information into a few small paragraphs. I do think you're onto something with the garden pre-quel angle. That was fun. It makes me want to see less dialogue from the Devil and instead put that information into a back story. That would keep the Devil dead-sexy and far more mysterious and dark. You always want to keep your hero ... dare I say it ... fuckable.

Cheers.