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Yes, I'd keep reading.
If I can offer some unsolicited advice, don't labor too much over your opening sentence. Get into the story, and when you go back for your first rewrite, you'll have a better idea of the hook you want to use. 
Looks like I'm the party pooper. I'm not really not into that sort of fiction any more. When I was younger, hell yeah I would have.
Oh.
It's fiction? 
I would c:
Yep. Sound like a new horror novel to me!
I would not. A typographical error in the first line of a novel puts me right off.
Boru
‘But it does me no injury for my neighbour to say there are twenty gods or no gods. It neither picks my pocket nor breaks my leg.’ - Thomas Jefferson
 RE: Would you?
October 11, 2015 at 7:35 am
(This post was last modified: October 11, 2015 at 7:35 am by Alex K.)
It's not a bad opening line, but it should be immediately followed by good recipes to keep it interesting for your atheist readership..
The fool hath said in his heart, There is a God. They are corrupt, they have done abominable works, there is none that doeth good.
Psalm 14, KJV revised edition
 (October 10, 2015 at 11:50 pm)Kitan Wrote: If this was the opening sentence to a novel, would you continue reading? Maybe add some details about the baby, was it a cute baby, did it resemble Winston Churchill, actually scratch, that all babies look like Winston Churchill, that man could screw around. What did the mother look like? was she, for example, a young women in her mid twenties with hair pillar box red, wearing a skimpy red dress that clung to the body, caressing her form like an urgent lover. Ahem. I'm just off for a lie down. You can fix ignorance, you can't fix stupid. Tinkety Tonk and down with the Nazis. 
Does she then go back into heat sooner?
Good opener.
I don't have an anger problem, I have an idiot problem.
 (October 10, 2015 at 11:50 pm)Kitan Wrote: If this was the opening sentence to a novel, would you continue reading? Absolutely.
Whoever fights monsters should see to it that in the process he does not become a monster. And if you gaze long enough into an abyss, the abyss will gaze back into you
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