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Poll: Would you continue to read?
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Would you?
#1
Would you?
If this was the opening sentence to a novel, would you continue reading?

"She killed the infant shorty after giving birth to it."
"Never trust a fox. Looks like a dog, behaves like a cat."
~ Erin Hunter
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#2
RE: Would you?
Possibly. It's a perfectly good opening sentence, as far as these things go.
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#3
RE: Would you?
I just know that a great opening sentence is what catches one's interest. I keep trying and erasing. I think this is the route I want to go, though.
"Never trust a fox. Looks like a dog, behaves like a cat."
~ Erin Hunter
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#4
RE: Would you?
An opening sentence that's jarring is good. It gets the reader's attention right away...makes them feel they won't have to wade through the usual boring set-up details to get to the action.

I'd go with it, too.
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#5
RE: Would you?
Yes. Now I want to know why she killed the infant!
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#6
Would you?
(October 10, 2015 at 11:50 pm)Kitan Wrote: If this was the opening sentence to a novel, would you continue reading?

"She killed the infant shorty after giving birth to it."

No. Change it to this.
"She ate the infant alive shorty after giving birth to it. The shrieks and screams only fueled her hunger."
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#7
RE: Would you?
Um, no xD
"Never trust a fox. Looks like a dog, behaves like a cat."
~ Erin Hunter
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#8
RE: Would you?
(October 11, 2015 at 12:57 am)KUSA Wrote:
(October 10, 2015 at 11:50 pm)Kitan Wrote:


No. Change it to this.
"She ate the infant alive shorty after giving birth to it. The shrieks and screams only fueled her hunger."
This woman is clearly an atheist. Wink
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#9
RE: Would you?
Don't get me wrong, my characters are always atheists in my novels, but no. xD
"Never trust a fox. Looks like a dog, behaves like a cat."
~ Erin Hunter
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#10
RE: Would you?
Sure.  Sounds promising.
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