(May 22, 2012 at 12:47 pm)Godschild Wrote:(May 22, 2012 at 9:50 am)RWH Wrote: Will you enjoy your place in god's choir
Warming your feet by hells torturous fire
Friends and family screaming in pain
You watch them suffer, all in vain
A wrong tenet of faith has put them there
A small mistake they each will share
But you enjoy your place in god's choir
Friends forever will stoke the fire.
Roy W Heron 5/22/2012
Welcome to the forum, you need to study scripture and find the mistakes in your poem.
Chastisement without correction is just plain old cruelty.
Nice first impression Christian.
I can only ask again that you lose the hate.
Regards
DL