Chriatian Phoenix's Deadlt Rant

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I would like to thank the one person that broke down and quoted me, shows you took time to read the premise if only to point out how stupidly it was written, that rabbit guy is that a religious thing ,as rabbits are in plague proportions in said location and could easily end up as road kill. Bottomless cask of wine , when the young girl drinks from it as they walk as a group thru hot as ,outback of Australian water is always distributed, with the adults as they drink it from morning till dusk ,they receive water ,come night time beer and wine.

I wasn't trying to make you sound stupid but I was having a little fun at your expense. Keep writing. Your premise isn't bad as it has a very surreal quality to it that could actually be very funny if done correctly. You need to work on your sentence structure a bit so that people can understand you.

I like to write and am, sadly, somewhat of a failed writer as I have been rejected by the best agents. LOL So, I know the pain of having your work picked apart.