Chriatian Phoenix's Deadlt Rant

[jackson]

Ironic that a person like myself would want to write as a profession. More ironic its that my movie forum(full of professional writers) did not feel the need to point out bad sentence structure but were more concerned with my entrance into hell yet here on an atheist forum I sorta seeing what theist meant when referring to atheist know it all ism. This is is on first line and I'm after forum

[JesusHChrist]

The key to good writing is clarity. And if one is merciful, brevity.

[Alex K]

Sorry, twas a stupid joke

[Creed of Heresy]

As an Atheist would you watch a purely fictional comedy, in which an Atheist carpenter has his place of work and worldly possessions destroyed by fire , then feels compelled to simply walk the hundreds of kilometers to his new job , walking unaware that a rant against religion secretly recorded and edited portrays him as a terrorist ,thus making a wanted man. Collecting 12 needy people along the way, quick to point out to anyone thanking God ,that God had nothing to do with it , feasting on kamikaze animals ,that run under passing vechiles and food stuffs that randomly fall from trucks ,while drinking from a bottomless cask of wine that tastes like
beer, water or wine depending on who or when they drink. Eventually being chased down and killed becoming a Marta for Atheists, but unfortunatly returning as the second coming of Christ, and announcing her was wrong. Not

[jackson]

Very poor OP please feel free to pick apart.

[Creed of Heresy]

I'm less interested in picking a post apart, and more about trying to understand what I'm reading. When I have to actually pick apart a post in order to understand the wording, it makes it difficult for me to focus on the subject, since I'm having to put all my attention into just understanding what's been said.

[Creed of Heresy]

Aha, I parsed the meanings.

I dunno. I'd find a concept like that interesting.

Hell, I'm a Warhammer 40,000 fan(boy). Anyone familiar with the lore will know what I'm saying ahead. Something I found interesting was how the God-Emperor of Mankind was himself an atheist. During his galaxy-wide war to unite all of humanity under his single banner, he abolished all religious practices, making it illegal to worship any gods, even the worship of Him. He espoused atheism, and brought all of humanity under a society that venerated and adored scientific progress and inquiry, learning, and understanding. He was an actually eternal individual, immortal, and was, in all meanings of the word, the God of mankind.

Eventually he was betrayed by his son, Horus, and in the battle between them, Horus was obliterated, and the God-Emperor severely wounded, and would only survive by being connected to a giant life support machine known as the Golden Throne. For the succeeding 10,000 years, he would remain in a half-life, half-death, and all of mankind continued onwards only by his half-existence providing the beacon of navigation that all ships used for their equivalent of FTL. In that time, he became venerated as a God, in the spiritual sense, thus leading to the Imperium that he had built becoming a highly religious culture, and interestingly, all of humanity only persevered by their faith in Him, as the galaxy mankind dwells in during that time slowly and steadily gets worse, and worse, and worse.

I found it an interesting metaphor for how even a society of atheism built by an atheist could, in the worst of circumstances, become a society of the most oppressively religious in the name of survival...though the question ever remains in WH40k; IS that faith truly necessary? Or has it weakened humanity, and steadily led more and more reliance upon their faith to ruin their resolve and individual strength?

So. Yeah. I guess I could get behind such a story.

[Nope]

Ironic that a person like myself would want to write as a profession. More ironic its that my movie forum(full of professional writers) did not feel the need to point out bad sentence structure but were more concerned with my entrance into hell yet here on an atheist forum I sorta seeing what theist meant when referring to atheist know it all ism. This is is on first line and I'm after forum

Hopefully, you will have success as a writer but the rather mild criticism you have received on this thread pale to what some agents will tell you. It can be a very humbling experience to have your work rejected. Most of the people on this thread, myself included, like your idea. You asked if atheists have a sense of humor so many of us responded to your post with some humor. No one meant to tear your idea apart or hurt your feelings. I hope that you can get this made into a movie but you will have to work your sentence structure in some order to pitch the idea to potential investors.

May you have lots of good luck and success in your film writing career.

[jackson]

I don't mind criticism

[Exian]

You ought to get a group of friends who can dedicate some time and just make the damn movie. Fuck studios and agents. DYI is the best way to go. Learning the proper script format alone is enough to make you throw in the towel, especially with your troubles with the written word- trust me, I'm not far behind you. Most of the obstacles you'll run into seem to exist through collusion (not to sound like a conspiracy nutter) and for the express purpose of maintaining the oligopoly.

Spike Lee and Robert Rodriguez are great examples of the DYI approach. There are many inspirational talks by both of them that I recommend you hunt down and take notes. You can also learn a lot from youtubers. Some of them write, set-up, shoot, and edit their material all by their lonesome. The obstacles go from being some faceless entity deciding your fate based on unclear criteria, to very tangible and doable things like the cost of a decent camera and editing program.